Monday, 27 June 2011

Lovin' the Language Blogfest



Wahoo! It's been a busy weekend for me, in more ways than two. Yesterday was the Queer Film Blogathon and today is the I'M LOVIN' THE LANGUAGE FIESTA!

This amazing blogfest is hosted by Jolene B. Perry, and I want to thank her for it. The rules are simple: Pick any five lines or any five SHORT excerpts from one of your WIPs. If you're feeling shy, and don't want to share from your own work, share from something you LOVE.

Today I would like to share three sentences from my current WIP, Bane Hollow and the Apocalypse of Judgment. I could very well quote from my favorite novels, but others have beaten me to the chase.

This first piece is near the middle of the novel. Bane and his buddy Styx are getting ready to fight a "monster."


Styx took a deep breath. "Okay, I'm gonna strike first. I'll try and freeze it and if that doesn't work I'll have to battle it. If it's got me in a headlock, I want you to jump in and cut off its ass. If that doesn't work and I'm eaten, I then want you to take whatever's left of me and sell it on the black market, okay?"

This next one speaks for itself.


Mr. Winky lived in a hot pink high heeled shoe. 


"Terribly embarassing," he told Bane and Styx. "Though, I'm powerless to disapprove--wifey likes the ghastly thing, and I've learned, after three hundred years of marriage, that my needs don't matter." 

And this last piece is from a scene break in the second chapter. It illustrates a dilemma many children face, which is often acted upon in tragic ways.


Bane killed his father that night.


He stabbed him in his stomach, slit a gash in his neck and thrust the cold steel into the devil's heart. The blood splashed and flowed like a pipe but Bane didn't care. He had endured beatings for far too long and it had to stop! He had to die! And so he continued to kill him--carefully tracing the sword that dug into his father's head. The paper trembled on his knee as he drew, tears splattered every empty space. The page was slipping into the wind. He tried to grab it with his left hand, but his wrist. . .just wouldn't move. Away with the breeze the paper flew, until it was going. . .going. . .gone into the clear night sky.


And there you have it!

Thanks again to Jolene for hosting this and I can't wait to read the other AWESOME entries!


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21 comments:

Michael Offutt said...

The title of your work in progress "demands" attention.

Tracey Neithercott said...

I love that last excerpt, especially the ending!

Jolene Perry said...

NICE JOB! Those were great.

Kayeleen Hamblin said...

So fun! Lots of gripping imagery.

Jo Bryant said...

Lovely job - great words woven together. :)

Shallee said...

Fascinating! These had some great insight into the story as a whole. I'm intrigued. Thanks for sharing!

Summer Ross said...

Mr Winky- LOL that was terrific!

Lucy Adams said...

I like that the last excerot is actually a surprise. At first I thought he's actually killed his father. Then I thought perhaps he had a dream in which he killed his father. Then I kept reading . . .

Nice work!

Lucy

Dawn M. Hamsher said...

I like your sense of humor. This was my favorite:

"Terribly embarassing," he told Bane and Styx. "Though, I'm powerless to disapprove--wifey likes the ghastly thing, and I've learned, after three hundred years of marriage, that my needs don't matter."

The Write Soil

Kelly Hashway said...

This is such a cool idea. I love your excerpts!

Krispy said...

The humor's great, but I loved the last one. The shift into the ending was unexpected but seamless!

T.D. McFrost said...

Me? You guys had some awesome entries! I was totally amazed by them!

Thanks so much for the comments everyone. I actually felt like I did something good with my writing. ^_^

Vicki Rocho said...

I love "Mr. Winky lived in a hot pink high heeled shoe." hysterical!

Kelley Vitollo said...

LOL. LOVE the selling on the black market part. Great jog.

Trisha said...

Your excerpts were all quite different - I really liked them all! Great work :)

Lisa Potts said...

Damn, I missed this blogfest. Hate when that happens.

You should definitely feel good about your writing, TD. You do fantastic things with imagery and your sense of humor shines through too. Great job!

DEZMOND said...

Love Mr. Winky :)Nice sense of humor!

And the last excerpt was a bit brutal for me.

Phil said...

Any book that contains both a hot pink shoe and a grisly death scene is definitely going on my reading list!

Medeia Sharif said...

Great excerpts! They're deliciously gruesome.

T.D. McFrost said...

Thanks so much for the kind words everyone. Sorry I've been away so long, but I'll be back very soon. ^_^

Keep good all!

Michael Offutt said...

I have given you an award sir!

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